lay down your pain

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lay it down

can’t pull it down

won’t wear it down

don’t throw it down

lay it

lay it

lay it

down

down

down

move on

can’t stay here

won’t last here

don’t stop here

move

move

move

on

on

on

lay it down

can’t slow it down

won’t live it down

don’t tear it down

lay it

lay it

lay it

down

down

down

move on

can’t turn back

won’t hold back

don’t look back

move

move

move

on

on

on

gotta let it go

can’t keep it up

won’t give it up

don’t heat it up

gotta let it

gotta let it

gotta let it

go

go

go

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come on…

can’t you…

won’t you…

why don’t you

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lay down your pain

lay it

down

down

down

move

on

on

on

let it

go

go

go

lay down your

pain

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an absolutely fabulous song and inspiration for my poem ~

“Lay Down Your Pain”    Toni Childs

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artwork ~  “Pain”   Tetranecro
{ creative commons }

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this is my submission to ~

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Open Link Night ~ Week 75    at   dVerse ~ Poets Pub
submit a new or old poem

thank you,  Joseph!

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Poetry Pantry #129   at    Poets United
submit a new or old poem


thank you,  Mary!

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Open Link Monday   at   imaginary garden with real toads
submit a new or old poem


thank you,  Kerry!

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i am also participating in ~

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NaBloPoMoSoup

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46 Comments

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46 responses to “lay down your pain

  1. I am so glad I read this… <3

  2. what a hard week…we do have to lay it down…because we cant carry it forever…it will jack us up…really lyrical….nice dani

  3. Laurie Kolp

    Your powerful words express an important message, Dani. Thanks for this!

    • the song inspired the poem which i actually wrote last Thursday but did not post for some reason. it seems more fitting now… many thanks for your visit and kind comment, Laurie! ♥ Happy Holidays!

  4. Your image-choice is perfect for the words and vivid visual layout of this piece.

  5. lay it down, move on and don’t look back…not a bad way to deal with pain me thinks..

  6. very cool how you formatted this.

  7. Dani: This is such a powerful piece. Yes, you must lay your pain down, or it will/can consume you. I felt that way with the nation on Friday (it was a bad day for me to start with as it was the anniversary of my hubby’s passing) but then the news, and the horror. I do put it away, and say prayers and hope for the best for all. Your poems are so inspiring. Thank you for your kind visits this year and encouragement. I am blessed to have made a great blogging friend. Enjoy the holiday season.

    • i lost my fiance less than a week before Christmas in 1986, so i empathize with what you’re going through. i hope the coming year brings you joy, Winnie! ♥

  8. Sadly, it takes some a life time to let go. What a waste of energy. Nice form for the poem.

  9. Lay it down yes, it’ll stay down. The trick is in determining the resolve and it would follow suit. Nicely dani!

    Hank

  10. I think some people do hold on to pain. They ought to take this advice. But, then again, they may get a payoff from holding on.

  11. absolutely. Lay it down

  12. For me, the layout speaks to the urgency of your message-really well done I thought!

  13. This message is definitely something I needed to hear today… thank you.

  14. part of letting it go is giving it compassionate attention, and the gradually, bit by bit, everything passes. Beautiful poem.

  15. Until I reached the word “pain” I could relate it to us reaching up to the status we should have due to the peer pressure surrounding us..and then I read pain, and boom it came right down inside my heart..and yes, I will try to lay it down and move on..thank you so much. Very powerful.

  16. Strongly written. The way you lay it out and repeat the lines really gets the message across.

  17. I love the first Stanza and the repetition (and love the song). The continuation down the page makes it a song, I know, but to me it became the image of an angry person backing me into a corner. Scarey.

    • oh! i didn’t mean for it to be scary! more trying to get someone’s attention, but i can see how you could perceive it that way. i’m happy you loved the song ~ i think it’s amazing. thanks for your visit and comment, Susan! ♥

  18. There is something almost biblical in the image, and the red on black, with the repeating words, gives something of a shock effect. Very bold poetry.

  19. We will never get better/healed when we continue to carry our pain…your words and the song implore the reader to let go…lay it down. Love this piece!!

    • this song is so powerful! Toni Childs is absolutely amazing, isn’t she? i wrote this a few days after the Sandy Hook Elementary School shooting ~ what else can we do with that kind of pain? thank you so much for your visit and kind comment, Susie! ♥

  20. peggygoetz

    Another of your creatively arranged poems. Each of your postings is like a visual piece of art as well as a poem! I hope all of us can work at putting away our pain!

  21. Karen

    …would love to hear this as spoken word…

  22. Ah…this is lyrical and so very good. Love the use of type size!

  23. You got me in with these rhythmic lines…. Yes we have to lay it down… I already did. Wonderful!! :-)

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