∙ʡ ∙Ϧ∙∙ i don’t care {plus love & desire revisited}

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i don’t care
what you hear
what you think
about her
about him
about you
about me

i don’t care
what you see
what you feel
about us
about them
about the whole fuckin world!

why should i care?
what you want
what you need
what you want
what you need

who fuckin cares
about me?

i don’t care
what you say
what she said
what he said that some body said that   said

i don’t care
what “they” say either
“they”
can go fuck
“them”
selves

do you think i really care?
that this is all a facade?
well, then you don’t know me
you don’t know shit

cuz i DON’T care
about any body
any thing
any body
any thing

why should i care?
what you want
what you need
what i want
what i need

it’s all a bunch of  fuckin shit
it’s all a bunch of  crap

ain’t nothin gonna matter
ain’t nothin gonna last

ain’t nothin
ain’t nothin
ain’t nothin
ain’t nothin
left for me

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i know! the second eminem song in a week~ this one didn’t inspire my poem in any way, but this IS the beat of my verse ~

“Till I Collapse”    Eminem

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on 14 February 2012  i posted a poem titled  “love & desire” {here}  along with the Eminem/Rihanna song “Love the Way You Lie.”   i  turned the verse into a ‘visual’ poem {using spacing, italics, bold, capital letters, custom characters} even though it didn’t feel “right.”  i often use some sort of  visual element in my posts, but as an enhancement of  what i am saying, not simply as decoration.  i think i should have gone with my original instincts because NOT ONE SINGLE COMMENT referred to the poem {and song} as being about an abusive relationship.   i am not complaining about the comments!  i  was the one who put the focus on the appearance ~ everyone was so kind and seemed to like the “artistic” aspect of  the poem.  but i lost the meaning of  the words in the visuals….  many times a woman in an emotionally/verbally/physically abusive situation will “justify” or defend the relationship, which is what i was attempting to portray.   sometimes  the addition of  visual elements work.  this time it didn’t.  if  you are interested, i have the poem below in plain text…  what do you think?  [ the full lyrics to the song are at the bottom of  the original post of  “love & desire” {here} ]  oh, hey!  do you realize that the verse is made up entirely of  haiku/senryu?

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love & desire

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give  in  to desire…
fall  in lust…    feels  like  you’re  on
fire…    you  wanna burn

{{ tell  yourself   it’s  love…
worth  any  pain…    any   hu-
miliation,  yah }}

there  really  ain’t   no
other  way…    intoxicat-
ing…     addicting,  yah

we’re  connected  like
Siamese twins…    at  the  heart…
can’t  get  no closer

nobody  ever  loved
like  this  before…    we’re unique…
bet  you  jealous,  yah

you  can  only  dream
of  finding love  like  ours…    once
in  a  lifetime,  yah

if  you  spend  all  your
time waitin  for  prince  Charmin’
you  the  one  losin

we  don’t  need  your  app-
roval…    we  don’t  need  nothin
but  each  other,  yah

happily ever
after  sounds  boring  to  me…
i  wanna live! yah

{{ have  you  ever  seen
stars like those?   almost  worth  the
pain…     i   asked  for  it}}

it’s  such a rush  when
tempers   flare…    makin love  burns
so  much  hotter,  yah

livin  ev’ry  day
like  it   may be the last…    get
it  while  you  can,  yah

carpe diem  ba-
by!   i  feel  vital!    alive!
{{ no  doubt  about  it}}

give  in  to   desire…
fall  in  lust…    feels  like  i’m  on
fire…    wanna  burn,   yah

it’s  worth   any  pain…
it’s  real   love…         you  know i like
the  way  it hurts,  yah

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“Love The Way You Lie”    Eminem  ft. Rihanna

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this is my submission to these FABulous sites for poets ~

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Poetics ~ Visual-eyes-ing     at    dVerse ~ Poets Pub
prompt:    image above by Reena Walkling/missing moments
{ i looked at the above image, thought “cold” and then this verse came in its entirety.  i don’t understand the connection either. } { this is not autobiographical. }

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The Poetry Pantry #88      at     Poets United
submit a new or old poem

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i am also participating in ~

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NaBloPoMo Soup

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14 Comments

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14 responses to “∙ʡ ∙Ϧ∙∙ i don’t care {plus love & desire revisited}

  1. ha– great beat in your write…and def. some grit as well…and hey…i don’t know you so well…but i bet you care even if others don’t …smiles..

  2. it is def a rough song…have you heard part 2 from her album? abusive relationships suck…goes without saying but…and honestly there are always multiple sides but no guy should ever hit a woman…then again, you would be surprised at how often the woman is an abuser…or maybe not…nice write dani…strong language and attitude….

    • listening to it now {smile} any type of abuse, be it verbal, emotional, sexual, physical ~ any type always escalates, and {as you know} gets handed down to the next generation. and yes, women are guilty of abuse too. thanks, brian.

  3. Well, this definitely has a rap feel to it, but it doesn’t sound like a good place to be… to not give a crap about a thing.

  4. Nice beat here….I do like him too..he is an awesome singer ~

  5. A lot of time and effort were given to make it express what you felt, feel. The Haiku were an added attraction. Nice work.

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