ɤ∙Ɣ∙ɤ home again ɤ∙Ɣ∙ɤ

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8 years old
dressed in crinolines
white anklet socks
black patent leather shoes
no one to see you in the bedroom
except Barbie

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mommy’s make-up
red lipstick
black eyebrows
rouged cheeks
like Barbie
like mommy

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children should not
be seen or heard

say goodbye
to the home that never was a home
you don’t want to go back
better off where you are now

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“You just can’t go home again”   David Cassidy

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this is my submission to ~

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Meeting the Bar:  Imagism    at    dVerse ~ Poets Pub
prompt:   Imagism

thanks for the interesting post and prompt, Victoria!

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You Can Go Home Again    at   POETRY JAM
prompt:   You can go home again

thank you for the great prompt, Mary!

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The Thursday Think Tank #81     at     Poets United
prompt:   Goodbyes

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Prompt #140   at    Carry on Tuesday
prompt:   use all or part of  ”Where now? Who now? When now?”
the opening line from Samuel Beckett’s novel ‘Unnameable’

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i am also participating in ~

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NaBloPoMo

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24 Comments

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24 responses to “ɤ∙Ɣ∙ɤ home again ɤ∙Ɣ∙ɤ

  1. not sure if this is really where you were going, but made me think of child abuse.. and there are certainly homes that do not deserve the label home at all..

  2. really interesting site! liked your poem prompt response to imagism, “home again” –

    esp the lines “like Barbie / like mommy”

    usually i like to see a character resolve and go back to their roots, even if only somewhat, but gotta say, was glad when the poem resolved itself to “not” going back, esp to a home that was never a home

    nice work, thanks!

  3. Really good poem! The ending was unexpected, and made the point that things are not always as we perceive them to be.

    http://charleslmashburn.wordpress.com/2012/01/19/black-words/

  4. ugh…never seen or heard….no they need a bit more than that…

  5. Yes, for sure, some homes are those that one doesn’t want to return to. I can feel the painful memories in the words of your poem, but am glad that you have a home you enjoy NOW; as now is more important in life than THEN.

    • so true, Mary! ♥ i know this was not the response you were hoping for from your lovely prompt. {smile} and yes, my NOW is filled with love, thank you.

  6. there’s sadness in that childhood memory. :( you’re right, sometimes you just can’t go back to that time again.

  7. Shawna

    I really liked the first two sections; very crisp, clear descriptions. I would have ended it with “like Barbie, like Mommy” though. I don’t think the final bit is necessary. I think the comparison of Barbie and Mommy, left hanging, would say all that needs to be said, but with more of a punchy ending.

    • i think i agree with you, Shawna ~ the first two stanza are better poetry alone. i’m really bad at self-editing. thank you for visiting and commenting! ♥

  8. Whew…you weave a story there with just a few words…this is a sad one ~

  9. Do I even need to say that I know just what you’re about with this one?

  10. Helen

    I felt the emotion in every line … great writing.

  11. hmm. quite thought provoking. LIke Barbie Like Mommy

    And thank you for David Cassidy… my fist HUGE crush! :)

  12. love this,

    smiles.
    make a contribution to us if you could, bless you.

    experience something fresh and new, have fun, you rock.

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