time slipping…

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time

slipping through her

fingers as she

watched

numb

.frozen.  in place listening

to each minute

……………………..fall

…………………………away

unable to take the next step

her breath held in

anticipation

then………………..

silence

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……………………………………………..outrage

stuck in her throat………………………

unable to get past her disbelief

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she

watched

as the tide carried

a seashell back out into the

ocean’s depths………..drowning…………..all

her

hopes

leaving only

fear and

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anger

and

time just

kept slipping

through her fingers

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………………………gone………………………forever………………….

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this is my submission to ~

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One Stop Poetry Form Monday   .  at  .   One Stop Poetry   .  a Fabulous site for poets
free verse
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Poetry Potluck   .  at  .   Jingle Poetry   .  a Fabulous site for poets
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Mag 69   .  at  .   Magpie Tales
prompt:   image above
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3 Word Week #15   .  at  .   READING & WRITING BY PUB LIGHT
words:   her, outrage, seashell

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Prompt #271 at Sunday Scribblings
prompt:   “the next step”
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Prompt #109   .  at  .   Carry on Tuesday
prompt:  “slipping through my fingers”
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i am also participating in  ~

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NaBloPoMo

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Post A Day

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32 Comments

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32 responses to “time slipping…

  1. I like where you took this picture prompt from Magpie!

  2. This flows like the tide. The formatting of the poem brings a gentle slowness to the reading that only enhances your words.
    Very nice!

  3. wonderful piece of work was on the edge of my seat with every word!

  4. dynamic words.
    perfectly fine tuned words.
    Thanks for sharing.
    ;)

  5. i like the metaphor of the seashell being carried out into the ocean for time slipping through ones fingers…powerless against the tide..

  6. Good write, effective use of “. . .” to simulate drowning. =)

  7. Very nice. I enjoyed this.

  8. dunstancarter

    I like how everything just ebbs away – sad and gentle

  9. Beautiful capture of a moment!

  10. soon enough those same tides will wash another shell onto your shore, but the sands they will never return…lovely write dani…love your form on this…

  11. Helen

    A really great poem ….

  12. There is nothing quite so unsettling as that feeling of powerlessness…and before the tides of time, all are powerless in their way…nice use of the seashell imagery!

  13. I love the flow as someone said its reminds me of the ebb and flow of the water. I love the deep conveyed with the movement and the volatility of emotions just stunning

  14. A work of art dani – brilliant!

    Anna :oo]

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