ζ • field of dreams • ζ #5lines

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Photograph  .   courtesy of  .   Fee Easton
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in Oz the Cowardly Lion slept

in a field of  poppy dreams

while the Wicked Witch

was plotting against

poor Dorothy  …and Toto,  too

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somewhere a field of  poppies

turns smoke  …thick with despair…

into broken dreams and broken lives

or flows through veins like magic

blocking out the pain for an hour or two

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i would like to thank  Fee Easton  {  @bootcoot  }  for her generosity in providing a selection of five photographs at  .  One Stop Poetry  .  as the prompts for this week’s  .   One Shoot Sunday.  please go to her  .   flickr photostream  .   to see more of  her stunning photography, including the photograph  .   above.

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this is my submission for  ~

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One Shoot Sunday  .  at .  One Stop Poetry. go check out some of  the other entries or even submit one yourself.  take some time to look around the site if you’ve never been there ~ it is FABulous!

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The Poetry Pantry #49  .  at  .  Poets United
{submit an old or new poem}
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i’m participating in ~

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May 2011  .  at  .  NaBloPoMo
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Post A Day

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May 2011: International 5 Line Poetry Month
sponsored by  .  Tina Nguyen .  at  A wish for the sky…
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this was intended to be a mirror 5 line poem ~ a 5 line poem followed by a reverse 5 line poem.  i am not certain what type of  poem it is now.  when i wrote it, i thought i was writing a cinquain which can be written three different ways ~ 2/4/6/8/2 syllables; a didactic cinquain of:  noun – 2 adjectives – 3 ing words – a phrase – synonym of noun; or 5 lines of  words. this is where my confusion comes in.  i originally found one description which said it should be 2/4/6/8/2 words, which is how i wrote it and the reverse. then i found another  .   description   .   stating it should be 1/2/3/4/1 words. {sigh} so i didn’t worry about the word or syllable count.  i think that this might qualify as a  .   pentastich  .   which is a 5 line free verse poem except that i have two 5 line verses.  it might also be loosely qualified as   .   gogyohka  .   although they are usually much more succinct. or you might just call it two pentastich or two gogyohka since each verse can stand on its own.

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26 Comments

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26 responses to “ζ • field of dreams • ζ #5lines

  1. jgavinallan

    I get confused. Is this your work Dani?
    This is beautiful. Wonderful words surrounded by a lovely, but intense picture.

    If this is you Dani—this is my favorite.

    Jaye

    • wow! thank you, Jaye! the poetry is mine. the photograph is by Fee Easton. if you click on her name under the photograph, it will take you to her flickr photostream. very, very few photographs on the site are actually taken by me. {except the hibiscus which is my gravatar.} credit and a link to where the photograph came from are always at the bottom of the photo. i’m so pleased you like this. my laptop froze/and or crashed at least half a dozen times since i started the poem Saturday evening. as soon as i can, i’ll be visiting your blog. thank you so much, Jaye, for your visits and very kind comment. ♥

  2. dustus

    Special props for rhyming poppy dreams with Dorothy! The second half sounds like a needed escape considering the “broken repetition” and emphasis on despair. Imaginative take on the prompt.

  3. ah love the second one and the hope it brings…very nice….

    • thank you, Brian. you know how much i appreciate your visits and comments. ♥ i hope Logan enjoyed his experience this weekend, no matter what the outcome. {smile}

  4. Lovely poem Dani!
    Great imagery from one of my favorite movies of all time.

  5. Poem and photo are wonderful. I could see those beautiful fields.

    Raindrops”

  6. Very nicely done.
    I saw some of Fee’s photos when I visited One Stop Poetry…they are amazing!

  7. You succeeded in bringing in Oz! I attempted to, but it didn’t work. It is what I always think of when I see red poppies.

  8. i like your mirror poem – could stand as two separate ones as well.. the wizard of ozz….who would’ve thought of him…cool you did..

    • thank you, Claudia! ♥ i’m really fudging the 5 line poems when i do two verses, but i do try to make them able to stand alone. i LOVE your octain! ♥ i do so appreciate your visits and kind comments. ♥

  9. moondustwriter

    I hear the line poppies, poppies…

    • i don’t wear perfume often, but when i do it’s Opium. poppies are gorgeous flowers, but my first thought upon seeing them is opium. {smile}

  10. moondustwriter

    Ugg I hit the comment too soon
    Your work is broadening Dani – nice job
    Your most recent post is almost impossible to read as the font color is so light
    Moony hugs

    • thank you so much! ♥ i look at the poetry that you and Shân and Sean and all of the poets behind One Stop Poetry write and, truthfully, i sometimes feel like giving up writing. i’m getting more comfortable in the fact that most of what i write is very simple and straightforward. i have to turn off my laptop to cool, but i’ll do something about the font color asap. i really appreciate your visit and kind comments. *hugs* ♥

  11. Such dreamy images and then the sharp hit of reality.
    An excellent piece of writing.

    Best wishes, Eileen

  12. reflective and smart …
    well done.

  13. Marvelous work! I wrote a poem for the sunday shot but i was too late entering (only just). If you want to check it out look me up – the poem is “Immortal Bloom” – A 55 word poem.

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