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Photograph courtesy of  Simon K. Lloyd
“Morning sun”

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beyond the border

‘tween sky and earth flies the  Sun

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rising and setting

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East and West ~ the Sun reigns o’er

the day    …..even when not seen

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i would like to thank Simon for the generous use of  his gorgeous  .   photograph .  you can see more of  his stunning photographs and poetry at  .  Simon’s (a)musing.  Poems and Pixels  .  and  .  simonscotland’s flickr photostream.

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tanka

from One Stop Poetry Form  .  at  .  One Stop Poetry

Today the standard form for tanka is generally noted as a 5 line poem, (in syllables) 5-7-5-7-7.

A tanka is not one poem, but two. It’s a combination of two poems, or thoughts, etc.  The first three lines are called  Kami-no-ku (upper poem). The last two lines of 7-7 is called Shim-no-ku, (lower poem). They are joined by that middle pivot line, called kakekotoba.

The kakekotobais a pivot or bridge between the two main poems.  It should be part of the upper verse AND the lower verse in thought or poetry.  The pivot line is both the last image and end of the upper verse as well as the first image and beginning of the lower verse.  Both poems, read divided…the top from the bottom, should be able to stand on its own.

This last unit of 7-7 is used as a repetition or summary of the top poem.  I think of this shim-no-ku more as a re-enforcement or continuation of the sentiment of the whole poem…..Read More

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this is my submission for ~

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One Shot Wednesday  .  at  .  One Stop Poetry
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Prompt 166  .  at  .  One Single Impression
prompt:  border

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May 2011: International 5 Line Poetry Month  .  sponsored by Tina Nguyen at  .  A wish for the sky…
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May 2011  .  at  NaBloPoMo
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8 Comments

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8 responses to “·» Sun «·

  1. nice…one of the universal constants that remind us that life is stable…hope it does not burn out…smiles.

    • i hope so, too, though i think we humans will have destroyed the earth before the sun burns out. {trying to be an optimist?} thank you for your visit and comment, Brian. i always appreciate both. {smile}

  2. Simon’s sunrise ~ reaches ~ across ~ the sea ~to inspire #5lines
    brilliant :~)

  3. beyond the border…this gives so much space to breathe…like the image…very nicely done dani..

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