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i have lived a life of sin
tryin’ hard just to get by
not even god can help me now
i’m too far gone… too far along
innocence
a faint whisper
from long ago
i don’t believe in redemption
Jesus ain’t gonna save my soul
sometimes the guilt and the pain
bring me to my knees
but tears of repentance
don’t wash nothin’ away
can’t lose faith since i never had any
there’s no saving grace for me
the day may soon come
when payment
will be due in full
a pound of flesh
or an ounce of soul
it won’t really matter
’cause the cost’ll be higher
than i wanna pay
sing hallelujah
sing hallelujah
amen
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this song is the inspiration for my post ~ it’s just a poem
i won’t get into a religious discussion in the comments
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artwork ~ “Naked woman with dripping hair” Pablo Picasso
{ fair use }
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this is my submission to ~
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Get Listed! at imaginary garden with real toads
prompt: use one or more words from a word list
i had written this poem a couple of weeks ago, but had not posted it
it already contained one of the words ~ innocence
thank you, Fireblossom!
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OpenLinkNight ~ Week 78 at dVerse ~ Poets Pub
submit a new or old poem
thank you, Tashtoo!
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Poetry Pantry #132 at Poets United
submit a new or old poem
thank you, Mary!
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i am also participating in ~
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lyrics ~
One time around the block
Two times around the clock
Three times, don’t cross the little lady (lady)
So pretty and, oh, so bold
Got a heart full of gold on a lonely road
She said, “I don’t even think that God can save me” (save me)
(Am I) gainin’ ground
(Am I) losin’ face
(Have I) lost and found my saving grace
Thankful for the gift my angels gave me
Born alone, we die alone
‘n’ I’m just sittin’ here by the phone
Waitin’ for the Lord to send my callin’
Street wise from the boulevard
Jesus only knows that she tries too hard
She’s only tryin’ to keep the sky from fallin’
Any man who says it’s Heaven and Hell
Prob’ly got somethin’ useless to sell
You ask me if I’m saved, but what’s it to ya?
Blow a quarter, cop another eight
You’re runnin’ out of high, you’re losin’ your faith
Throw your hands up and scream, “Hallelujah”
Hallelujah, Hallelujah
Hallelujah, Hallelujah
Amen
One time around the sun
Another year older and my work ain’t done
It’s time for me to write the final chapter (chapter)
Deal the cards and roll the dice
Sex, drugs and rock ‘n’ roll are my only vice
Tryin’ to figure out just what’s here after (here after)
Hallelujah, Hallelujah
Hallelujah, Hallelujah
Hallelujah, Hallelujah
Amen
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The complete blog was amazing. The music and the thoughts made the reader ponder many things. I like the music. First time I heard the song.
you are so kind, John! thank you! i wish you would write more frequently so that i could return your visits! {smile} i love the song!
Such an amazing opening line and i love how the idea expanded and narrowed down the page. Strong vocal presence here.
thank you, Kerry! ♥ your opinion means a lot to me! much appreciated!
Nice weaving of words Dani ~ I specially like:
one day soon
payment in full will be due
a pound of flesh
or an ounce of soul
thank you very much, Heaven! ♥ payment always comes due in the end. {smile} lovely to see you!
Yes, that world-weary feeling comes through, in song and poem. Innocence we reject in our adolescence, deserts us in our middle years, and search for endlessly in our age. Happy New Year, dani.
“innocence we reject in our adolescence, deserts us in our middle years, and search for endlessly in our age.” wow, Joy! you really summed it up so well! ♥ i hope your new year is off to a wonderful start!
First of all, I have never seen this Picasso painting and I was aghast at seeing it here, because it looks incredibly like a woman I painted many months back. EERIE!
About your writing: You took a perspective and point of view and carried it through to the end, a focus that poets often lose. Additionally, you used diction representing a particular dialect and kept that consistent as well. Nicely put together.
i had never seen this Picasso either, but immediately fell in love with it. thank you so much for your kind, kind comment! ♥ much appreciated, Kim!
One of my favorites using FB’s word list!!!! (I also like the look and feel of your blog)
Happy New Year Ms. Dani
thank you so much, Helen! you are too kind! ♥ the red hibiscus is my “winter” look. {smile} wishing you a very very happy new year!
Wow…you capture the tone and run with it for sure…hopeless but in the same breath empowering because it doesn’t seem to phase the narrator…she’ll survive.
she will survive until the very end! {smile} thanks so much for your visit, Hannah! ♥ hope your new year is off to a good start!
Dani….
The next time you feel the need to REALLY sin.
Give me a call….:-)
LMFAO!!!! i’ll remember that! {i’m working on a 55, G ~ hope to post it in the wee hours of the night ~ you may like it, too as the title is “fuck you”}
so lyrical…i dunno, you’d have to get pretty far for grace not to catch you , you know…nicely spun dani
that’s actually the premise of the cable tv show “Saving Grace” where Grace is sent a ‘last chance’ angel. {smile} thanks for your nice comment and visit, Brian!
I really love the stanza that starts with blow a quarter. This poem has great legs and the feel of a hustle. Makes it quite fun to read….loved it.
have a little experience with blow, do we? you do know he doesn’t mean the coin, right? {smile} thank you very much for your visit and kind comment! ♥
Wow Dani, you really gave us the insight and portrait of a fickle heart~
Trying to find her way and being seduced by ?! whatever charmed her.
I love how you layered this and found it revealing and thought provoking!
Well Done…what a great painting..you captured its essence, perfectly :D
Happy New Year to you n’ yours <3
thank you so much, Ella! ♥ happy happy new year!
I can’t separate poem from poet, and it makes me sad if you sound sad, sis.
i promise… i swear! this is NOT autobiographical!!! i fell in love with the song {and what little i’ve seen of the cable tv show} and this is just what came out. it ain’t me, babe! *HUGS* ♥
The second offering tonight I have found that draws inspiration from the lyrics of songs. I do it often as well as I just love music. Here I also get introduced to something I would probably not otherwise listen to, so I have to say thanks for that.
Never seen the show being a limey ;-)
There is simply nothing not to like here!
thank you so much, Tino! you are too kind!
Very cool poem. k.
thank you very much, Karin! ♥ i appreciate your visit and comment.
I felt sad reading this, but can appreciate it so much. You wove a good poem of despair, and you wrote it so well.
i promise it’s not autobiographical! thank you so much for your visit and comment! ♥
It’s very bleak, someone believing damnation but not redemption. I do think, however, many may go through this, and you’ve captured that outlook very clearly.
i can’t imagine existing without hope! thank you very much for your visit and comment, Jack!
such sadness, I long to meet this person and reassure that there is no cost of receiving forgiveness and love.
it would be a very lonely existence, wouldn’t it? thank you very much for your visit and comment, Emma! ♥
Your words so often have a unique slant, Dani. Good to see you in Poetry Pantry.
thank you, Mary! ♥ i’m very happy you’ve kept the Poetry Pantry going!
Wow… this was very powerful. The song, the painting, then your poem made for a very powerful and beautiful experience.
thank you so much, Serena! ♥ i appreciate your visit and kind comment.
So poignant – “innocence a faint whisper from long ago”.
thank you so much for stopping by, Sherry! ♥
Very profound words, with a great sense of hopelessness attached. I would hope, that somewhere along the journey of life, that a glimmer of hope could be seen….It is necessary…
Eileen
it is indeed! Thank you, Eileen! ♥
Dani, great song and excellent poetic riff on it too :-) Sometimes you just have to let it rip, regardless of where it takes you.
isn’t that the truth! thank you so much, Sara! ♥
I like the way you keep the spirit of the song and yet make it into something new.
thank you, Rosemary! ♥ that’s a great compliment!!