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as the wind blows chill
and the willow weeps
as day turns to night
and half the world sleeps
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as the sun and moon
chase each other ’round the sky
as the stars just watch
never wondering why
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as time wanders by
because it can’t stand still
life doesn’t stop
and it never will
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i turn in my grave
unnoticed by all
my death meant nothing
no one heeds my call
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as the earth keeps turning
my soul now sleeps
as the wind blows chill
and the willow weeps
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this is my entry for One Shot Wednesday at One Stop Poetry.
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Ah, nice. Life does go on as they say. But, then, so does death…
this poem actually surprised me. the beginning two and a half verses came all together and i had no idea where to go from there so i put it away. came across it today still with no idea where it was going. my muse likes to trick me sometimes. {smile} thank you for your visit and kind comment, Richard.
as sad as this is it is a delightful read, great cadence and rhyme…my death meant nothing sticks with me as i dont want that at all….
this one came directly from my muse and quite surprised me with where it went. thank you for such a nice comment. well…. until the death part anyway. {smile}
Beautiful and haunting Dani, this could almost be a triolet you know ;)
when i finished this, the thought crossed my mind that your triolets are influencing me. i am unable to understand everything involved in writing a proper triolet, though. i’ve always liked, and often use, repetition in my long verse. thank you for such a sweet comment. *hugs* ♥
The world watches and is so helpless.
Interesting take on mortality through your personifications of nature, the universe, and time. I think the first stanza is such a well done, melodic opening; and I enjoyed the poem very much overall.
wow! thank you SO much, Adam. the first stanza came to me as a whole and then the rest in bits and pieces. i wasn’t expecting it to be about death at all.
Ah!!! So deep and powerful imagery you have created here. I liked your lines..
‘i turn in my grave
unnoticed by all
my death meant nothing
no one heeds my call’
So powerful. Thanks for sharing.
ॐ शांति ॐ
Om Shanti Om
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thank you ever so much! i value your opinion. your poems were truly amazing!
So soulful and moving, Dani… it really makes us feel the immenseness of our insignificance on a grander scale of things..
An amazing poem, my dear…
thank you, Kavita! ♥ i really appreciate you kind comment. ♥ {by the way, i’m working on a reblog of two of your posts right now that i’m scheduling for March 17th at 9:00am PST (US). of course, i will only show the beginnings of your poems with a link to your blog to “Read More”}
Haunting, and a real pleasure to read. Thank you.
thank you so much for visiting and commenting. i really enjoyed your One Shot ~ great blues.